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Z138767739_thumb lovetowrite said on Tuesday 27th of April...

I wrote this for one of my English class's assignments. We had to do a short story where two strangers meet in a frozen food section of a store. Hope you enjoy!

Sparkling-Stars xXxBebba0BxXx said on Monday 17th of May...

It was really good! I love all your stories- you're an amazing writer!!!

Dark (49) Dark_She_Wolf said on Thursday 8th of July...

What a sweet story, I like the idea that meeting someone once can change your life, even if its just the kind of ice cream you like, it might seem insignificant but its not, meeting her changed him, and in that way she lived on. It is a tender, touching story, and I really enjoyed reading it. Just a few errors, with the spelling I saw, and the way you described them, perhaps if you can make it a bit more smooth, instead of a list of feachers.

001_moment Frantastic said on Tuesday 27th of July...

I really loved the simplicity of it. Two strangers meet and one is changed forever through a beautifully simple-tho brilliant-conversation. I love it when characters are used as ideas like Dublin, plus i think its great u didnt actually give her a name. Gives a kind of dream like quality to her.

001_moment Frantastic said on Tuesday 27th of July...

Only single tiny thing I would change would be the quick ending, just the way he learns about her death, goes to the funeral and the only description is that he isnt know. This is probably only because Im a description nut - seriously can't get enough of the stuff. but other than that it's marvellous, really marvellous. You have a real talent and that in itself is incredibly rare.

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